The Archeology Enthusiast

As sweat dripped down my nose and mixed with the dirt, I yelled, “I found glass!” Glass is considered a rare find, and upon hearing my announcement the excavation team stopped digging. Later, as I sat under the overhang on the laboratory roof patiently brushing dirt off a pottery shard and reconstructing a pot from the shard, I realized that archaeology parallels the process of producing a paper: piece by piece and note-card by note-card.

I did not come to Mallorca, Spain for any personal enlightenments, but rather following my passion for Egyptology and archaeology. I was determined to excavate, and although Mallorca is not Egypt, this was my opportunity to do so. I love solving puzzles — discovering pieces, analyzing their importance, uncovering relationships and then utilizing the information to produce a final work. An archaeologist discovers an object; draws on knowledge of the culture, materials available, and history to analyze the finding; then deciphers its role and determines its value. Writing, research, legal study, and legal practice share this process with archaeology. Instead of finding a pottery shard in soil, the discovery is information and requires similar research and analysis.

The challenge of researching and analyzing an unknown subject is the most enjoyable part of academic life. An honors thesis I wrote on Colombian environmental policy allowed me to study a topic about which I had been ignorant. I chose Colombian environmental policy because my Latin American Politics class did not cover Colombia, and I was interested - having previously  written - about French and American environmental policy, in a comparative study of different countries' environmental policies. Colombia, however, presented a greater challenge due to the paucity of available material. After the Colombian consulate was unable to help me, I located one of the few experts in the field who directed me to relevant material. I threw myself into a controversial topic, formerly unknown to me, and transformed it into something about which I was knowledgeable. I had dug up a piece of glass, and synthesized as much information out of it as I possibly could.

The Colombian paper also stands out as one of my favorite projects because of the analysis and interpretation it required. The class analyzed events using a matrix comprised of political, social, international, and domestic factors. The environmental articles offered no obvious explanations or reasons for the events; my analysis relied solely on my interpretation. Just as archaeology or a research paper require using relevant data to produce a sensical conclusion, so too does the law. It requires the generation of arguments and evaluation of relationships, facts, and precedents. The interpretive aspects of law and legal practice attract me.

Writing is much like replicating a clay pot; it conveys your conclusion. Just as when the archaeologist spends more time constructing the bowl from a shard, the more effort and patience the writer devotes to writing the better they convey the conclusions. The paper I wrote for a politics and business class best demonstrates this point. For this paper, research material was abundant. The challenge was to persuasively present my arguments as a Ford Motors representative whose job was to fight environmental legislation. All the information was provided; the true test was analyzing perspectives, best utilizing and manipulating the facts, exploring various ways to approach the situation, and convincing the reader to accept my policies.

In addition to my affinity for research and writing, my work experience has confirmed my desire to learn more about the law. Currently, I am working at an Internet firm that focuses on the real estate industry. One of my assignments, researching the possible expansion of the company into the art industry, required delving into a field I knew relatively little about. Through researching similar Internet art-related services, interviewing presidents of art associations, compiling a list of artists and galleries, and developing sales material, I was exposed to a new area. I enjoyed learning about this unknown industry. The law and the Internet share constant variety, both are continuously evolving, and require constant research and learning.

Through my various jobs and internships, the breadth and variety inherent in the law has impressed me. Especially at my current job, where my employer prepares for heavier regulation of the Internet and new legislation regarding copyright, privacy rights, and pornography, the law's omnipresence is looming. My work at John Smith's law office exposed me to some of the realities of law such as the legal atmosphere, the commitment and initiative required, and the diversity of the work. Whether helping research, correcting dictation, or watching Mr. Smith in court, I was glad to have participated in the legal process.

The thrill of discovery that I so enjoy in my academic and professional life partially stems from my travel experiences. Whether traveling on a dirt road in Kenya taking a pregnant woman to receive her malaria medication, observing the species Darwin studied, visiting my grandfather in Italy, or submerging myself in French culture, my travels expose me to different facets of humanity. My experiences on foreign soil allow me to evaluate daily situations as well as academic works from a unique perspective. It was a trip to Egypt that fostered my interest in Egyptology which led to my reconstructing a pot and drawing parallels between archaeology and the law.

Three pillars of law school and legal practice--research, analysis, and writing--are activities I enjoy. Whether organizing hard-to-come-by research on stacks of note-cards or compiling data on dealers, art magazines and the like, I like discovering and embracing a subject, learning about it in depth, and then applying what I have learned through school, work, and travel. Law requires a constant commitment to learning new precedents and digging deeper. Law will allow me to find the pottery shard, analyze its location and markings, discover its purpose, reconstruct the pot, and complete the puzzle.

Our Analysis

Attention-grabbing opening: The author of the essay immediately grabs the readers’ attention by placing them in the midst of the scene and vividly conveying what the author felt and saw as well as the excitement she felt.

Vivid, visual opening and consistent use of opening imagery: You can practically feel the dripping sweat and the heat at the opening of this essay because the applicant used vivid, sensory language that we can all relate to. She also quickly develops a simile comparing archaeological excavation with research in general and legal research specifically. She uses the imagery of archaeology (“finding the shard of glass,” “reconstructing the pot”) consistently throughout the personal statement to convey not only the unusual experiences she’s had in the past, but to show her love of research and analysis.

A clear theme that ties the essay together: Her essay has a clear theme, which she states at the end of the first paragraph and in her conclusion. (You may not need to state it twice; that depends on your essay.) The applicant also relates every experience in the essay to her theme of research, analysis, and discovery.

Solid structure: Because her theme is so strong, the essay is easy to follow even though she has diverse experiences that aren’t obviously related to each other—archaeology in Spain, research on Colombian environmental policy, working for an online real estate company considering entry into the art market, and her travels.

Good use of transitions: Transitions help your reader move from one topic to the next as you connect the topic in the preceding paragraph to the topic in the next. They can consist of a few words or a phrase or simply repetition of the topic by name as opposed to using a pronoun. The first paragraph in this sample essay ends with “research and analysis” and the next paragraph begins with “The challenge of researching and analyzing an unknown subject” as she turns from her introduction to her enjoyment of academic life and the research she had done in college.

While one could argue that perhaps she has too many subtopics in this essay, because of the strong theme and excellent use of transitions, the essay holds together and highlights her diversity of experience, curiosity, and sense of adventure. As long as the multitude of topics doesn’t confuse the reader or leaves them with some gap of information that went unfilled due to the lack of space, the essay can remain cohesive and readable.

Most importantly this law school personal statement earned its author a seat at an elite T10 law school.

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