While the World Sleeps

Beep, beep! Beep, beep! I wake to the ear-splitting sound of my alarm clock at 5:30 a.m. The world outside is dark and hushed. My weary body feels drained of energy, but I struggle out of my warm, comfortable bed. Straining to open my eyes, I stumble to the closet and pull on my reflective running tights and neon windbreaker. As I fumble with the laces of my running shoes, I consider calling in sick. But despite my bed's magnetic pull, I manage to leave the house at this ungodly hour to join the cross-country running team in a rigorous eight-kilometer training.

Cross-country running, a sport that fuses body and mind, maximizes your physical ability by testing your mental tenacity. “It’s mind over matter,” Coach always tells us. Every day represents a new struggle to beat yesterday's maximum output. I have known the agony of this conflict since I joined my school’s newly established cross-country team as a freshman.

I remember going up to the cross-country table at lunch during my freshman year to sign up for the team. I’d always been interested in sports and wanted to try competitive running. The girls at the table were athletic seniors who looked so mature and confident. I was intimidated by them; I wanted to be like them. They welcomed me when I approached the table, asked me about the sports I played, and invited me to join them that afternoon for training.

That invitation changed my life. The seniors on the team mentored and looked out for me. They took me shopping, helping me choose my running shoes and advising me to buy bright, reflective clothes so I’d stand out on the side of the road early in the morning or late at night. They taught me core and leg exercises and cheered me on as I slowly began to chip away at my time.

Our bond as a team was cemented every morning when we met before sunrise, headlamps bobbing, and ran through the neighborhoods around school. Fatigued in the freezing cold, drenched in pouring rain, huffing up and down hilltop subdivisions, we ran through the sleeping streets, practicing the discipline that cross-country demands. I constantly pushed myself to run faster and farther, for my team as well as for personal glory.

Last year, I severely sprained my ankle during a run. The pain was excruciating, scissoring up my leg as the ankle twisted. My teammates gathered around me and calmed me. They alerted Coach and my parents, then helped me ice, wrap, and elevate my leg.

Over the next few months, I worked hard to regain my strength and balance. Rehabilitation wasn’t easy. I missed my teammates and was disappointed by my slow progress, worried I’d never be able to run like I had before. There were many days I considered just giving up on running. But Coach insisted that rest was essential for healing. “Setbacks happen,” he said. “You have to be determined to get back up.” So every day, I made small steps toward my goal. I did calf raises, worked with resistance bands, and cycled on a stationary bike. I became an expert at taping my ankle and learned to alter my form to better protect myself from future injuries.

After several months of gradual, determined progress, I felt a great sense of accomplishment the day I rejoined my team at practice. All of the rest and slow, purposeful exercises had paid off. When practice was over, Coach took us out to celebrate. By the end of the year, I improved on my time, running 10 kilometers in 43 minutes. I was able to succeed because of my team’s encouragement and the unflagging commitment running has taught me.

Developing this discipline has aided me in my studies as well. After recovering from my sprained ankle, I learned I could apply the same dedication and tireless effort to power through a difficult algebra assignment or while preparing for my final exam in chemistry. Coach was right, mind is stronger than matter. If I concentrate and put my mind to it, I can achieve the goals I set for myself and realize an outcome I’m proud of.

The road to success is never easy, littered with obstacles, pains, and sprains. I run with the awareness that I am steadily reaching my goal–each step takes me closer. In my mind, I see a victory line that symbolizes the results of my perseverance and hard work. This line makes me realize that ambition and tenacity never go in vain.

While the world sleeps, I, Jane Smith, am working hard to attain my athletic and academic goals. I feel more confident now that on the road of life, while others may be walking, I will be running. I will run through ankle injuries and through fatigue. I will endure the inevitable hills and valleys. I will endure, and I will achieve.

Our Analysis

Overarching theme unifies the essay: The writer returns to the subject of cross-country running again and again throughout the essay. Not only is it an athletic activity she’s passionate about, but it also serves as a metaphor for her ambition, tireless effort to succeed, and her determination. As she states in the final paragraph, “While others may be walking, I will be running. I will endure the inevitable hills and valleys.” In athletics and beyond, she is determined to push herself to the limits of her ability while others may choose the more comfortable route.

Descriptive first paragraph in scene captures essence of essay: In the first paragraph of the essay, we see the writer drag herself out of bed before dawn to put on her running gear. This allows the reader to immerse themselves in the writer’s world and identify with her. It also shows them the writer’s tenacity in action. Faced with the decision to stay in bed or run with her team in the cold, dark morning, the writer chooses the more difficult path. She makes this decision again and again throughout the essay, building character.

Overcoming a significant setback or obstacle: The writer recounts how after she sprained her ankle, she had to endure months or healing and rehabilitation that made her want to quit. But she stayed the course, focused on her recovery, and was eventually able to score a better running time. Sharing moments like this, when you faced a significant challenge and overcame it, shows readers your grit and perseverance. Failing and getting back up is strong indicator of future success.

Connecting athletic determination with academics: The writer also takes time to apply what she has learned through cross-country running to her academics. This paragraph could be developed more to show concrete academic accomplishments, but it shows how she is able to synthesize lessons about the importance of inner strength and drive and apply them to her studies.

Ending: The essay closes by returning us back to the image of Jane Smith running in the morning while the rest of the world sleeps. But after reading the essay and following Jane on her journey, we see that this image has gained a metaphorical dimension. Jane is willing to push herself outside her comfort zone in order to achieve her goals.

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