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Tightening Language
Want to know what I look for when I read an essay that tells a good
story, but is 20-30% over the essay guideline or word limit? It needs
editing, not major surgery. I don't really want to cut content, but I
must cut verbiage. I look for clues, signs of lazy writing. These quirky
writing tics tell me I can edit without taking away from the story line
or changing the writer's voice.
- Passive voice. I harp on this a lot, but flipping a
sentence from passive to active cuts words and usually creates more
readable, active sentences. And you want to be active in your
application essays! For example:
The project was completed by my team. (7 words)
My team completed the project. (5 words.)
- "To be" verbs. The verb "to be" has a legitimate place in
written English, but it is frequently abused. Whenever I see a "to be"
verb ("is," "are," "was," "were," "being"), my delete
finger gets twitchy. I start looking for ways to condense.
- This is the X that did Y. For example:
"This was the strategy that we pursued." (7 words)
"We pursued this strategy (4 words).
- Using noun forms of roots instead of verb forms. For
example:
"I came to the conclusion ..." (5 words) "I made the decision ..." (4
words)
"I concluded..." (2 words) "I decided..." (2 words)
- I am able to trim words when I cut "am able to."
"I was able to run the marathon..." (7 words)
"I ran the marathon." (4 words).
- Lots of independent and simple clauses. You can frequently
combine them and shorten the text. For example:
"My mom is a fantastic cook and has lots of event planning experience.
She helped me prepare for the fundraiser." (20 words)
"My mom, a fantastic cook and experienced event planner, helped me
prepare for the fundraiser. (15 words).
When you see these lazy writing fingerprints, check if editing will
distort the essay's meaning. If not, it's DELETE time.
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If You Are Preparing a Resume for a Transition, Beware of Muddying
the Message
Are you seeking a new job involving broader, higher-level
responsibilities than you have yet undertaken, or applying to MBA or law
programs from a technical background? You probably need to update your
resume. If you're coming from a specialized background, beware of
muddying your message by mingling too much technical detail with
business-related information and accomplishments. When seeking a
position that focuses more on management, problem solving, and strategy
than on the technical qualifications of your specialization, communicate
your technical expertise swiftly and succinctly. Provide more detail in
the points that demonstrate your understanding of the business context
and the accomplishments that impact the overall venture.
In essence, this involves some "letting go." You are proud - rightly so
- of your accomplishments in your field. They've become part of your
professional identity. But to move on, you must let those details go -
at least in your resume. Rather than spotlighting your development of a
highly successful application platform, for example, show how your
understanding of the system's potential market impact drove your
conceptualization of the product.
If you're targeting a business or management position that will directly
employ your technical expertise, say IT product manager, the principle
still applies. However, add a bit more technical detail - enough to
convey your qualification for the position - but maintain the
pre-eminence of the business message.
Your resume will be most effective if it has a clear focus, and that
means making the decision to emphasize one thing over another. Trying to
"balance" technical and business messages equally will only muddle your
message. Impressive as your technical accomplishments may be, their
intricacies will probably make your potential employer's eyes glaze
over. On the other hand, she'll be thrilled to read about how your
initiative to obtain more extensive customer feedback contributed to the
successful market impact of the new technical application while also
prompting a more rigorous internal development process.
By Cindy Tokumitsu
Editor/Writer, Accepted.com
Member, The Professional Association of Resume Writers
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