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March 2006 Volume 9, Issue 3
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Accepted.com Odds 'N Ends


In This Issue:
 
What's New at Accepted.com
 


Accepted.com in the News
I was interviewed and quoted in a recent Boston Globe article, "Wrangling Over Applications." Please click on the next link for my view on the tempest in a teapot surrounding MBA admissions consultants.

Paul Bodine, Accepted.com editor and author of Great Application Essays for B-School and Great Personal Statements for Law School, was interviewed extensively for the MBA Podcaster segment, "MBA Application Essays and Recommendations."

MBA Podcaster turned to Accepted.com again for the following segment when it interviewed me for "MBA Admissions Strategic Plan: What You Can do Now To Help You Get Accepted Next Year."

Save 20% on the Featured Book of the Month: The Nine Mistakes You Don't Want to Make on a Law School Waitlist, an excerpt:

Mistake #3: Hide your genuine interest in the school.

You probably discussed your reasons for wanting this school in your essays. Or you aren't really sure why you want to attend. Or you have been rejected everywhere else, so this is your last hope. There's no point in elaborating on your interest. Right? Wrong.

Right Move: Reinforce the idea that this is the best school for you to achieve your goals.

If you want to know why this information is important and how to present it, look on page 10-11 of our featured ebook of the month, The Nine Mistakes You Don't Want to Make on a Law School Waitlist. And remember, save 20% on The Nine Mistakes You Don't Want to Make during the month of March.

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Essay Tip
 
 
Personal Statement Fatal Flaw #4: Superficiality
(Continuing my series on essays that sound like baby talk and are frequently application killers.)

When you write superficially you tend to blend into the great mass of applicants who on a superficial level are very much like you. They have the same goal. They have prepared similarly to gain acceptance. Of course, blending in is exactly what you don't want to do.

How can you distinguish yourself? Use specifics to tell your unique story and portray yourself distinctively. As Maxx Duffy, my colleague in MBA Admissions Advantage, says, avoid "umbrella words." Umbrella words are words that have broad definitions and represent desirable qualities in the admissions process. For example "leadership." Yes you want to demonstrate leadership. But you don't want to do so by blabbing on and on about your leadership qualities. You want to provide an example that shows you in a leadership role and break down your role into sub-categories of leadership that were key to your success. For example, some components of leadership that you can focus on:
  1. Listening.
  2. Initiating.
  3. Mentoring.
  4. Teaching.
  5. Persuading.
  6. Organizing.
  7. Establishing a goal or vision.
  8. Motivating.
  9. Managing
  10. Obtaining buy-in.

And this is just a sample. Not all leaders can claim these qualities and only a handful can write about the specific example you will provide. So remember:

  • Avoid umbrella words
  • Use specific examples

And banish superficiality from your application essays and personal statements.

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Resume Tip
 

Adcoms: Application Resumes Are Important
If you think the resume you tuck into your B-school application is a throwaway or minor component, think again. Listen to what adcoms really think about resumes (some quotes courtesy of BusinessWeek Online, � The McGraw-Hill Companies):

"We look to see [on the resume] that the candidate has been making an impact in their professional life. We like to see growth in responsibility over time, evidence of teamwork and leadership experiences."
--Laurie Stewart, Executive Director of Admissions, Carnegie-Mellon University

"Your resume should include a summary of your employment (including job titles and company names), education, extracurricular, and community activities. Be sure your resume is complete and accurate, without unexplained gaps in the chronological history."
--University of Iowa (Tippie School)

"A resume should be submitted that describes, at minimum, each full-time position you have held, summer jobs held in college, and relevant part-time positions. It is important that you include dates of employment, firm/employer, location, job title, and responsibilities. After you describe your work experience, you may tailor your resume, to best represent your individual skills, interests, honors, and activities."
--University of Maryland (Smith of Business)

"I was talking to a colleague this morning about how she reviews resumes: from bottom up, i.e., she looks at extras/community first before where they work or where they went to school."
--Rod Garcia, Director of MBA Admissions, MIT (Sloan)

"All applications received are evaluated. Interview is the last thing we review in your file. Resume is the first - so do a good resume!"
--Kris Nebel, Director of Admissions, University of Michigan

"When we look at the application, we're looking at the work experience and we're very much looking at the resume."
--Rita Edmonds, Director of MBA Admissions, Babson College

"We also look at the resume, and we feel it's very important to assess the candidates' work experience; . . . Then the work experience is very important, and that can be assessed through the resume, how they answer the essays, and recommendations."
--Jen Chizuk, Director of MBA Admissions, Michigan State University

"We look for accomplishment, progression, level of contribution, leadership [on the resume]."
--Kristine Laca, Director of Admissions, Dartmouth (Tuck)

"There are three ways a candidate can demonstrate [their professional] maturity. The resume would be the first place."
--Carl Harris, Director of Admissions, University of Texas Austin

--Paul Bodine is Senior Editor at Accepted.com and author of "Great Application Essays for Business School" (McGraw-Hill 2005)

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