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December 2005 Volume 8, Issue 12
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Accepted.com Odds 'N Ends

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Paul Bodine, Accepted.com senior editor, has just published his first book with McGraw-Hill, Great Application Essays for Business School.

You can't gain acceptance to top business schools without reflective, genuine, well-written application essays. Accepted.com editor Paul Bodine shows you how to write outstanding essays by revealing both the right moves and the mistakes in Great Application Essays for Business School.

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Dec. 20 5:00 PM PT/8:00 PM ET/1:00 AM GMT Great  Application Essays Paul Bodine, author of Great Application Essays for B-school

And of course, last month's chats have generated must-read transcripts:

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Essay Tip
 
 
Lack of Substance
Last month I identified 5 fatal flaws in your essays:

5 Fatal Flaws:
  • Lack of substance - nothing demonstrates the qualities claimed.
  • Failure to answer the question.
  • Clich�d.
  • Superficial.
  • Lack of thought.

Let's explore them over the next several months, one by one, starting with Lack of Substance.

Writing about nothing tends to bore, like a trite sitcom or movie with no plot. They lack substance and so will your essay if it isn't based on:

  • Self-reflection.
  • Use of specifics, examples, and anecdotes.
  • Willingness to reveal your thought-processes and feelings.

Start your writing process with self-knowledge. You don't have to search the Internet or the library. Begin with your experiences and your dreams. Search your head and your heart. They store the substance of a good personal statement.

Then use anecdotes, specifics, and examples to reveal what's inside of you and show that your dreams are grounded in experience. Furthermore, good examples can bring your essays to life and engage the reader.
At the same time, recognize that essays with only examples and anecdotes don't reveal your motivations and consequently are also superficial. Make sure you balance your stories with insight and analysis.

Avoid Fatal Flaw #1. Let your essays portray reflection and astute use of examples balanced by analysis.

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Be Strategic
When preparing a resume for an admissions application, you need to be strategic in deciding what content is absolutely essential so your resume complements your whole application. You may well find you have to jettison one of your proudest accomplishments because it doesn't support the theme of your essays or the culture of the school you're applying to.

For example, suppose that you're particularly proud of a highly specialized and innovative bit of code you wrote for a mission-critical application. But it was in no sense a team project-you wrote it entirely on your own, its dollar impact on your organization is unquantifiable, and it was essentially a technical not a leadership achievement. In this case, if you have been using your essays to escape the "techie" pigeonhole and are applying to a school, like Kellogg, where interpersonal skills are highly valued, you should probably omit this "proudest moment" altogether.

Instead, include a bullet about the new process you initiated that increased group productivity by 5 percent or the time you led a team of four programmers in completing an understaffed project on deadline. These kinds of achievements will do a better job of positioning you as a leader rather than a cubicle-dweller. This is where "techie" applicants who simply cut-and-paste their work resumes--with all their specialized languages, acronyms, and industry-speak-into their applications run into trouble. They risk projecting the "propeller-head" image they've worked so hard in their essays to escape. Be strategic.

By Paul Bodine, Senior Editor at Accepted.com
Author of
Great Application Essays for Business School (forthcoming).

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